HOUYES. I AM DON WITH MY ENGLISH SOCIAL ADVOCACY REFLECTION :D

this i written in response to the question posted:
What does belonging in a community mean to me?

and you're supposed to write an expository on it :D


and here's my expository reflection essay thing (:

English Social Advocacy Project Reflections:
What does belonging to a community mean to me?

This begins, as all expository essays do, with a thesis statement. This is the thesis statement.

Yet despite the fact that the thesis statement is there, do you not think that this is the most boring introduction to any expository essay? You look at it and you think about how readers would feel about you, the writer of this expository essay, and how they would be put off from reading the whole expository essay. After subjecting this thesis statement to careful scrutiny, you decide that you need to add a little bit more meat in it. In fact, you need to add a LOT of meat in the plain old thesis statement.

And so, the thesis statement “this is the thesis statement” was changed to reflect your considerations to a better thesis statement: this is the thesis statement and it is a sentence. Definitely more meat, however you still think that it is lacking something.

You decide to show your friends this thesis statement, and you and your friends discuss about it over a cup of coffee, maybe two. Visiting various friends, you gain what you call opinion, and what I call field research. With these thoughts from your peers and future readers of the expository essay, you set about to make another change in it, and according to many of your friends, it needs more PUNCH. So, you cancel out the old thesis statement, and change it to: this is the thesis statement and it is a sentence, it is also the main back bone of my expository essay and it doubles as the introduction to my expository essay. Definitely more punch and meaning rather than more empty content or “meat”.

You look through the thesis statement and you ask your teacher about the thesis statement. She says, “Look, your thesis statement is too long, change it to something shorter.”

And so, you take the thesis statement back and change it again, according to advice, to: this is thesis statement it is sentence, main backbone, introduction to expository essay. You decide that it follows your teacher’s advice, and should automatically be better.

However, after much consideration with you and your fellow friends, you decide that it doesn’t work that way, and it would be grammatically incorrect. Thus you scratch the thesis statement out and write a new one: this is the thesis statement which is my introduction and backbone of my expository essay. You submit this and you are the only student that got a GPA of 4.0 for this assignment.

And that, is what I feel belonging to a community means to me. It means to bring about change, be it good or bad, and to shape your community to attain the highest reward and strive towards even greater heights, by bringing about change. Change, can never be always good or bad, and there will always be a silver lining to the dark cloud or the shadow that a bright light brings about.

Change, especially in a community is a specific and power given to only one who has been in the community and understands its needs and wants, and does their utmost to bring the whole community to satisfy these goals, and that is what I feel belonging to a community means to me.

Belonging to a community means to bring about change too serve and to lead the community to a place where the grass is greener. And that is the real thesis statement of my expository essay.



whoa. houyes and remember my term 1 ERP essay about my alma mater?
BWAHAH. i beat all the lit students by getting 24/30 which like OWNS :D



now i must go complete my EXCO apllication proposal -_____-